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Spencer D.W.'s avatar

This was a cool retelling of the story. I enjoyed the read. Biggest criticism would be that the dialog near the end felt off. maybe too explainy. It felt jarring for Wendy to stand up to him. at least time. I think it would of been cool if initially it was more physical. him trying to give hook what it wants but Wendy able to cleverly slip free and turn the tables.

other than my own personal preference not really anything else i could criticize one. well structured, kept me in suspense of what was gonna happen and ended kinda like a camp fire story might. gives it that lingering vibe.

great job! sorry it took so long to read this.

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Saint-Lazare's avatar

A clever retelling of a classic story that makes a very enjoyable read, congratulations!

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